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Essay writing

The question I will be answering to day is how does Williams Shakespeare explore the idea of fate in his play. Shakespeare is normanlly very much about the story of fate which will make it changeling to describe how he uses it.

well I think that he uses the play very well because in many different stages in the play mostly coming towards the end of the play he uses a lore of fate so that he can get to the ending that he want and a example of one is when Romeo sends his friend to go and see how Juliet is doing but at the same time friar Lawrence sends friar John to go and see Romeo to tell him about the plan but before he can arrive Balthasar has all ready gone and returned so he thinks that he is truly dead so he tells Romeo. Which then lead Romeo to return to return and kill himself because he thinks Juliet is dead. Fate plays a really big part in the end because it Leeds many people to do make rash decisions and not give them a chance to think about what there are going to do next or if something goes wrong what are they going to do.

Thanks to a good friend of my Gabriel reminding me of the weird way that Romeo and Juliet. Romeo went to go see if he can find his love but then tumbles on

I think that if Williams Shakespeare doesn’t put fat into the play I would that the play would miss out a lot which would make it very boring and a ordinary play but because he does put fate in it then it does stay as a Williams Shakespeare and is a very unique play which is his way of play.

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    Christopher Waugh

    There is some great material in this, Montel – and also some areas that need work.

    Your ideas and understanding are strong, so the work mainly needs to be in the area of how you express yourself.

    1) The essay needs to be broken into paragraphs – an introduction and then one paragraph per point you make.

    2) Many of your sentences are over-long. It’s hard for a reader to keep up with your ideas if you write too much without breathing space. I recommend you try to break your sentences up into one thought per sentence (much like this short paragraph that I’m writing to you now)

    3) Because both questions in the task allow you to go into great depth, I recommend that you don’t try to combine them. In the end this will lead to a superficial answer to both questions rather than a deep answer to one. Let me know if you can’t think of enough to say on one chosen question.

    I look forward to watching as the essay develops.

    Mr Waugh

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